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aapne ye behar de kar ab to is shayari ki silsile se hame to bahar hi kar diya lagta hai..... hame to behar kabhii aati hi nahi... ab kaise sher likhen..... sada rahin jo dil ke kareeb hamarii wo cheez puraanii dikhaane aaye pasand aaye to rakhiye nahi to hata dijiye  " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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terii baate.n hii sunaane aaye dost bhii dil hii dukhaane aaye [ahmad faraz] 2nd sher sada rahin jo dil ke kareeb hamarii wo cheez puraanii dikhaane aaye (dilip) 3rd sher Jhooti muskaan liye hooto.n per hum se hamdardi jataane aaye.. (zainy) Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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Jo laga kar gaye the aag abhi Khud hi woh aag bujhane aaye.............. Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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terii baate.n hii sunaane aaye dost bhii dil hii dukhaane aaye [ahmad faraz] 2nd sher sada rahin jo dil ke kareeb hamarii wo cheez puraanii dikhaane aaye (dilip) 3rd sher Jhooti muskaan liye hooto.n per hum se hamdardi jataane aaye.. (zainy) 4th sher Jo laga kar gaye the aag abhi Khud hi woh aag bujhane aaye.............. Fezan 5th sher pyar karne ke zamane aaye, aa jao mausam suhaane aaye, -sunita virender  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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6th December 2008, 07:08 PM
mujhe ye gazal samajh nahin aa rahi....
aage kaise badaun??? dilip ji ke ikhe hue doosre sheer ki ddosri pankti to sahi hai par pehli pankti mein 5 se zyada shabd hain... isi tarah fezan ji ke dwara likhe sher mein bhi shabd zyada hain... kya is larah likhna sahi hai??? gustaaki ke liye maafi chahungi, par sirf mann ki shanka ko door karne ke liye ye sawaal likha.... agar aap sab is baat se sehmat hon to kya hum is gazal ki pehli aur teesri sher ko rakh kar wapas shuru kar saktein hain??? aur agar mujhe samajhne mein kahin galti hui ho to plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz mujhe samjha dijiye... bura na maniyega... aapki -nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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7th December 2008, 11:35 AM
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aap ke comments paDh kar achchha laga.. par aap jo words ke count ki baat kar rahe hai.n, woh hindi aur urdu ke Ghazalo.n me.n laagu nahii.n hota...... hindi aur urdu ki Ghazalo.n ke liye ek alag metrical pattern hota hai, jise ki behr/meter kaha jaata hai... words ki counting shayad 'haiku', sonnets waghere me.n applicable hota hai.........Ghazal aur nazm me.n nahii.n...... haalaki kuchh sher behr par nahii.n likhe gaye hai.n.......par koshish zaari hai...likhenge to aage kaamyaabi bhi zaruur milegii sab ko.... ummeed hai aap ki shanka duur ho gayii hogii...... aur aap bhi is me.n ab shirkar kar sakti hai.n....... Mayank |
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7th December 2008, 11:55 AM
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terii baate.n hii sunaane aaye dost bhii dil hii dukhaane aaye [ahmad faraz] 2nd sher sada rahin jo dil ke kareeb hamarii wo cheez puraanii dikhaane aaye (dilip) 3rd sher Jhooti muskaan liye hooto.n per hum se hamdardi jataane aaye.. (zainy) 4th sher Jo laga kar gaye the aag abhi Khud hi woh aag bujhane aaye.............. Fezan 5th sher pyar karne ke zamane aaye, aa jao mausam suhaane aaye, -sunita virender rooThne ka tha sabab bas itna ki hame koii manaane aaye -Mayank |
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8th December 2008, 05:25 PM
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8th December 2008, 05:29 PM
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terii baate.n hii sunaane aaye dost bhii dil hii dukhaane aaye [ahmad faraz] 2nd sher sada rahin jo dil ke kareeb hamarii wo cheez puraanii dikhaane aaye (dilip) 3rd sher Jhooti muskaan liye hooto.n per hum se hamdardi jataane aaye.. (zainy) 4th sher Jo laga kar gaye the aag abhi Khud hi woh aag bujhane aaye.............. Fezan 5th sher pyar karne ke zamane aaye, aa jao mausam suhaane aaye, -sunita virender 6th sher rooThne ka tha sabab bas itna ki hame koii manaane aaye -Mayank 7th sher ashko ki guzarish hai rab se ab to woh hasane aaye par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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terii baate.n hii sunaane aaye dost bhii dil hii dukhaane aaye [ahmad faraz] 2nd sher sada rahin jo dil ke kareeb hamarii wo cheez puraanii dikhaane aaye (dilip) 3rd sher Jhooti muskaan liye hooto.n per hum se hamdardi jataane aaye.. (zainy) 4th sher Jo laga kar gaye the aag abhi Khud hi woh aag bujhane aaye.............. Fezan 5th sher pyar karne ke zamane aaye, aa jao mausam suhaane aaye, -sunita virender 6th sher rooThne ka tha sabab bas itna ki hame koii manaane aaye -Mayank 7th sher ashko ki guzarish hai rab se ab to woh hasane aaye 8th sher Hindu, sikh ka utaar chola, aaj hum bhi 'EID' mana.ne aaye -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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11th December 2008, 07:54 PM
chaliye ek aur gazal ka aagaz karte hain....
1st sher Hamein ye gumaan ke chaha humein zamane ne.. Azeez sab ko the, magar zarooraton ki tarah... (nm) -nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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16th December 2008, 04:47 PM
1st sher Hamein ye gumaan ke chaha humein zamane ne.. Azeez sab ko the, magar zarooraton ki tarah... (nm) -nisha 2nd sher: Sang un ke beeta ek umr bhi kuch lamho.n jaise bin un ke bit raha har lamha muddato.n ki tarah -Mayank |
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Hamein ye gumaan ke chaha humein zamane ne.. Azeez sab ko the, magar zarooraton ki tarah... (nm) -nisha 2nd sher: Sang un ke beeta ek umr bhi kuch lamho.n jaise bin un ke bit raha har lamha muddato.n ki tarah -Mayank 3rd sher: Toot kar chaha unhe,har lamha unhe yaad kiya jazb-e-ishq bhi nibhaya humne ibaadaton ki tarah _zainy Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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17th December 2008, 11:28 AM
1st sher
Hamein ye gumaan ke chaha humein zamane ne.. Azeez sab ko the, magar zarooraton ki tarah... (nm) -nisha 2nd sher: Sang un ke beeta ek umr bhi kuch lamho.n jaise bin un ke bit raha har lamha muddato.n ki tarah -Mayank 3rd sher: Toot kar chaha unhe,har lamha unhe yaad kiya jazb-e-ishq bhi nibhaya humne ibaadaton ki tarah _zainy 4th sher bhatakate rahe dar-badar pyaar kii chaah me Zindgii bita dii humne khana-badoshon ki tarah Dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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20th December 2008, 02:46 PM
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Hamein ye gumaan ke chaha humein zamane ne.. Azeez sab ko the, magar zarooraton ki tarah... (nm) -nisha 2nd sher: Sang un ke beeta ek umr bhi kuch lamho.n jaise bin un ke bit raha har lamha muddato.n ki tarah -Mayank 3rd sher: Toot kar chaha unhe,har lamha unhe yaad kiya jazb-e-ishq bhi nibhaya humne ibaadaton ki tarah _zainy 4th sher bhatakate rahe dar-badar pyaar kii chaah me Zindgii bita dii humne khana-badoshon ki tarah -Dilip 5th Sher tha mujhe aziz, esi liye uske zulm sahti rahi, us bedard ne nibhai waffa nafrato.n ki tarah -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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Is baar ek gair-muraddif Ghazal ki shuruaat karte hai.n......Gair muraddif Ghazal, matlab jis Ghazal par radeef nahii.n hai, aur sirf qaafiye par Ghazal hai.........Ghazal ka matla Meer Taqi Meer saahab ki Ghazal se hai..... na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa qaafiya: jaana, Lagaana. isi tarah, dikhaana, zamaana, fasaana, suhaana, manaana, sunaana, hansaana etc etc aap istemaal kar sakte hai.n jo dost behr par likhana chaahe.n is ke liye behr hai: Digital: 122/122/122/122 beHr.e.mutaqaarib, salim musamman fa-oo-lun/fa-oo-lun/fa-oo-lun/fa-oo-lun ***************************************** 1)na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa [Meer] |
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29th December 2008, 07:29 PM
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na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa [Meer] Mayank ji 2- kaatii thiin kitnii tanhaai.yon main raate.n ab aa gaya hai hame bhii akele muskuraana -Dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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30th December 2008, 06:26 PM
[QUOTE=dilip200;322337]1)
na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa [Meer Taqi Meer] 2- kaatii thiin kitnii tanhaai.yon main raate.n ab aa gaya hai hame bhii akele muskuraana -Dilip 3) yeh raahe.n muhabbat ki aasaa.n nahii.n hai kadam dar kadam tum sa.nbhal kar baDhaanaa [Mayank] |
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4th March 2009, 12:57 AM
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na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa [Meer] Mayank ji 2- kaatii thiin kitnii tanhaai.yon main raate.n ab aa gaya hai hame bhii akele muskuraana -Dilip 3) yeh raahe.n muhabbat ki aasaa.n nahii.n hai kadam dar kadam tum sa.nbhal kar baDhaanaa [Mayank] 4) mukammal jaha.n ki guzaarish na karnaa kahi.n jal na jae ye zalim zamaanaa.. -nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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5th March 2009, 09:48 AM
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5) fir mayooshii ki bate.n fir se wahi fasana mere sath muskuraao chhodo bhii ab bahana... Dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa [Meer] Mayank ji 2- kaatii thiin kitnii tanhaai.yon main raate.n ab aa gaya hai hame bhii akele muskuraana -Dilip 3) yeh raahe.n muhabbat ki aasaa.n nahii.n hai kadam dar kadam tum sa.nbhal kar baDhaanaa [Mayank] 4) mukammal jaha.n ki guzaarish na karnaa kahi.n jal na jae ye zalim zamaanaa.. -nisha 5) fir mayooshii ki bate.n fir se wahi fasana mere sath muskuraao chhodo bhii ab bahana... Dilip 6) thaam lo ye baahein,aa jao aagosh mein main saath hun tumhare, jo chaho dard bhulana.... -nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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nisha jee, aap ka sher thoda sa haT kar hai  ab Ghazal is tarah hai.. 1) na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa [Meer] 2- kaatii thiin kitnii tanhaai.yon main raate.n ab aa gaya hai hame bhii akele muskuraana -Dilip 3) yeh raahe.n muhabbat ki aasaa.n nahii.n hai kadam dar kadam tum sa.nbhal kar baDhaanaa [Mayank] 4) mukammal jaha.n ki guzaarish na karnaa kahi.n jal na jae ye zalim zamaanaa.. -nisha 5) fir mayooshii ki bate.n fir se wahi fasana mere sath muskuraao chhodo bhii ab bahana... Dilip 6) thaam lo ye baahein,aa jao aagosh mein main saath hun tumhare, jo chaho dard bhulana.... -nisha 7)yeh dard-e-muahbbat nahii.n hai bhulaana yehi hai merii zindagii kaa fasaana! -Mayank |
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13th March 2009, 07:30 PM
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na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa [Meer] 2- kaatii thiin kitnii tanhaai.yon main raate.n ab aa gaya hai hame bhii akele muskuraana -Dilip 3) yeh raahe.n muhabbat ki aasaa.n nahii.n hai kadam dar kadam tum sa.nbhal kar baDhaanaa [Mayank] 4) mukammal jaha.n ki guzaarish na karnaa kahi.n jal na jae ye zalim zamaanaa.. -nisha 5) fir mayooshii ki bate.n fir se wahi fasana mere sath muskuraao chhodo bhii ab bahana... Dilip 6) thaam lo ye baahein,aa jao aagosh mein main saath hun tumhare, jo chaho dard bhulana.... -nisha 7)yeh dard-e-muahbbat nahii.n hai bhulaana yehi hai merii zindagii kaa fasaana! -Mayank 8) Na nazrein milaana,na dil ko gaNvaana, Khuda aashikon se tu humko bachaana _ZAINY Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa [Meer] 2- kaatii thiin kitnii tanhaai.yon main raate.n ab aa gaya hai hame bhii akele muskuraana -Dilip 3) yeh raahe.n muhabbat ki aasaa.n nahii.n hai kadam dar kadam tum sa.nbhal kar baDhaanaa [Mayank] 4) mukammal jaha.n ki guzaarish na karnaa kahi.n jal na jae ye zalim zamaanaa.. -nisha 5) fir mayooshii ki bate.n fir se wahi fasana mere sath muskuraao chhodo bhii ab bahana... Dilip 6) thaam lo ye baahein,aa jao aagosh mein main saath hun tumhare, jo chaho dard bhulana.... -nisha 7)yeh dard-e-muahbbat nahii.n hai bhulaana yehi hai merii zindagii kaa fasaana! -Mayank 8) Na nazrein milaana,na dil ko gaNvaana, Khuda aashikon se tu humko bachaana _ZAINY 9) Kabhi muskarana kabhi ruuth jaana Teri in adaaon ka hun main deewana --Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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14th March 2009, 10:15 AM
arerererree
is gazal ko kahan tak kheenchne ka khyaal hai. kahan ho mayank ji........ " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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14th March 2009, 10:30 AM
are jaldi lapeto se koi nahiN to ye kaam maiN kar duNga...!! baad me na kehna muje...!!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ http://alfaaz-e-taish.blogspot.in/ Ishq hota tha, ishq karte haiN, Vo zamana tha, ye zamana hai... ----Taish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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14th March 2009, 10:47 AM
is ghazal ko 9 sher per kaise per kaise khatm kar sakte hain, chaliye main hi ek aur sher add kar deti hoon...
na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa [Meer] 2- kaatii thiin kitnii tanhaai.yon main raate.n ab aa gaya hai hame bhii akele muskuraana -Dilip 3) yeh raahe.n muhabbat ki aasaa.n nahii.n hai kadam dar kadam tum sa.nbhal kar baDhaanaa [Mayank] 4) mukammal jaha.n ki guzaarish na karnaa kahi.n jal na jae ye zalim zamaanaa.. -nisha 5) fir mayooshii ki bate.n fir se wahi fasana mere sath muskuraao chhodo bhii ab bahana... Dilip 6) thaam lo ye baahein,aa jao aagosh mein main saath hun tumhare, jo chaho dard bhulana.... -nisha 7)yeh dard-e-muahbbat nahii.n hai bhulaana yehi hai merii zindagii kaa fasaana! -Mayank 8) Na nazrein milaana,na dil ko gaNvaana, Khuda aashikon se tu humko bachaana _ZAINY 9) Kabhi muskarana kabhi ruuth jaana Teri in adaaon ka hun main deewana --Fezan 10)Na hasna na rona,khoye khoye rehna Hamein kya huaa hai koi humko bataana _ZAINY Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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14th March 2009, 11:07 AM
Mien bhi ek add kar hee deti hoon...
na sochaa na samajhaa na siikhaa na jaanaa mujhe aa gayaa Khud_ba_Khud dil lagaanaa [Meer] 2- kaatii thiin kitnii tanhaai.yon main raate.n ab aa gaya hai hame bhii akele muskuraana -Dilip 3) yeh raahe.n muhabbat ki aasaa.n nahii.n hai kadam dar kadam tum sa.nbhal kar baDhaanaa [Mayank] 4) mukammal jaha.n ki guzaarish na karnaa kahi.n jal na jae ye zalim zamaanaa.. -nisha 5) fir mayooshii ki bate.n fir se wahi fasana mere sath muskuraao chhodo bhii ab bahana... Dilip 6) thaam lo ye baahein,aa jao aagosh mein main saath hun tumhare, jo chaho dard bhulana.... -nisha 7)yeh dard-e-muahbbat nahii.n hai bhulaana yehi hai merii zindagii kaa fasaana! -Mayank [/B] 8) Na nazrein milaana,na dil ko gaNvaana, Khuda aashikon se tu humko bachaana _ZAINY 9) Kabhi muskarana kabhi ruuth jaana Teri in adaaon ka hun main deewana --Fezan [B] 10)Na hasna na rona,khoye khoye rehna Hamein kya huaa hai koi humko bataana _ZAINY 11) Hamien aata nahi hal-e-dil kuch aise sunana Gar samaj sako aankho.N se to hame.N bhi samjana -Purvi |
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14th March 2009, 12:00 PM
ya khuda ye kya ho raha hai......
fir main hi nayi gazal shuru kar dunga but pls ab isme naye sher post na karen " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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14th March 2009, 03:07 PM
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14th March 2009, 03:08 PM
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Dilip jee, aap chaahe.n to aap shuruaat kar sakte hai.n jaldi hi matla pesh keejiye Mayank |
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14th March 2009, 03:49 PM
shukriyaa mayank ji.
kal kisi baat per achanak ye lines niklin aur ek sher ban gayiin. main chahta hoon usii per gazal ka aagaz kiya jaye. Badkismatiii aaii merii khudkismati ke sath Shikwa karoon bhii kaise main zindgii ke sath...... " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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14th March 2009, 07:45 PM
Badkismatiii aaii merii khudkismati ke sath
Shikwa karoon bhii kaise main zindgii ke sath Dilip Jii KhwaaHishe.n laaKho.n hai.N puurii Hone Ke liye Har KhwaaHish judi hai teri bandiGii ke saath Grazie Pooja  ===========Deepika=========== Pyaar Hai Yaa sazaa ayi mere Dil bataa Toot'ta Kyu.N naHi.N Dard Kaa Silsilaa
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15th March 2009, 03:02 PM
KhwaaHishe.n laaKho.n hai.N puurii Hone Ke liye
Har KhwaaHish judi hai teri bandiGii ke saath Mangu khudase kya ye to batade Kwahish Mera to wajud hi juda hai teri zindagi ke sath 
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15th March 2009, 04:14 PM
Badkismatiii aaii merii khudkismati ke sath
Shikwa karoon bhii kaise main zindgii ke sath -Dilip Jii KhwaaHishe.n laaKho.n hai.N puurii Hone Ke liye Har KhwaaHish judi hai teri bandiGii ke saath -Grazie Kab tak kare.N meri khwishe.N yunh tera Intezaar Khatam na ho jaye zindagi koi tishnagii ke saath -Purvi |
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16th March 2009, 10:21 AM
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kyon khelte hain aap meri zindagi ke saath -Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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1st April 2009, 10:51 AM
Badkismatiii aaii merii khudkismati ke sath
Shikwa karoon bhii kaise main zindgii ke sath -Dilip Jii KhwaaHishe.n laaKho.n hai.N puurii Hone Ke liye Har KhwaaHish judi hai teri bandiGii ke saath -Grazie -Pooja Mangu khudase kya ye to batade Kwahish Mera to wajud hi juda hai teri zindagi ke sath -Khwahish Kab tak kare.N meri khwishe.N yunh tera Intezaar Khatam na ho jaye zindagi koi tishnagii ke saath -Purvi Maine to apne dil mein basaya tha aapko kyon khelte hain aap meri zindagi ke saath -Fezan filhaal to koi sher soojh nahin raha... par yahan ek sher ***** gaya tha to socha ise organise kar dun.... sabhi members se meri ek choti si guzarish hai ki jab bhi wo kisi gazal ko aage badaein, to plz apne se pehle sher ko uske likhne wale ke naam ke saath pehle copy karein fir apna sher post karein... aasha karti hun ki aapko meri baaton ka bura nahin laga hoga.... aapki nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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10th April 2009, 02:02 PM
Badkismatiii aaii merii khudkismati ke sath
Shikwa karoon bhii kaise main zindgii ke sath -Dilip Jii KhwaaHishe.n laaKho.n hai.N puurii Hone Ke liye Har KhwaaHish judi hai teri bandiGii ke saath -Pooja Mangu khudase kya ye to batade Kwahish Mera to wajud hi juda hai teri zindagi ke sath -Khwahish Kab tak kare.N meri khwishe.N yunh tera Intezaar Khatam na ho jaye zindagi koi tishnagii ke saath -Purvi Maine to apne dil mein basaya tha aapko kyon khelte hain aap meri zindagi ke saath -Fezan tera rooTh jaana, jaanaa.n lagta hai aise zindagii khafaa ho jaise zindagiii ke saath -Mayank |
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