Tanhaiyan

jasdeephere · **Tanhaiyan -** 20th March 2007, 11:54 AM

Hi Friends
I am very new to this forum. As i read everyone is writing their shares and ghazals, i also want to be a part of this.
Maine jo bhi likha hai woh bas mere haalat ne likhwaya hai pata nahi mujhe likhna aata bhi hai ya nahi par yeh 2 share apke sahmne pesh kar raha hun agar aap sab ki dua hui to shayad mere likhe in nagmo ka kuch mol pad jaye agar yeh kisi ek ko bhi achhe lage to.

"Fursat ke kuch lamhe nikal kar, thhey kuchh sapne sajaye maine,
Bedardo ki iss duniya se chun kar, thhey kuchh rishtey apnaye maine,
Magar waqt ko raas na aayi wafa meri aur,
Ho gaye Paraye woh mujhse, thhey kabhi jo apne banaye maine"

"Kabhi rooth jata hoon khud se, toh kabhi phir khud ko manaata hoon main,
Aata hai kabhi apne haalat pe rona, to muskura ke aansuon ko chhipata hun main,
Na jaane kaisa daur hai yeh waqt ka,
Khada to hoon main apno ki bheed mein, par khud ko tanha paata hoon main"

Hope for a reply from you very soon

Thanx & Regards
Jasdeep Singh

Taish · 20th March 2007, 01:33 PM

hmmm,
pehle to janaab aapka is parivar me maiN swagat karta huN, aur duaa karta huN ki aap yahaaN bahut ahcha waqt guzareN, khayaalat ahche haiN, bas aap yuNhi apne khayaaloN ko kalam ka raashta dikhate rahiye aur doosroN ko padhte rahiye isse bahut madaad milegi aapko likhne me,

aapko padh kar apni pichli dino likhi ghazal ki do line yaad aa gayi,

milne ko humse yahaaN log beshumaar mile,
par mehfil me sab tanhaai ke shikaar mile...

bas aage v janaab yuNhi likhte rahiye aap...!

Ek Ehsaas · 21st March 2007, 01:09 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by jasdeephere

Hi Friends
I am very new to this forum. As i read everyone is writing their shares and ghazals, i also want to be a part of this.
Maine jo bhi likha hai woh bas mere haalat ne likhwaya hai pata nahi mujhe likhna aata bhi hai ya nahi par yeh 2 share apke sahmne pesh kar raha hun agar aap sab ki dua hui to shayad mere likhe in nagmo ka kuch mol pad jaye agar yeh kisi ek ko bhi achhe lage to.

"Fursat ke kuch lamhe nikal kar, thhey kuchh sapne sajaye maine,
Bedardo ki iss duniya se chun kar, thhey kuchh rishtey apnaye maine,
Magar waqt ko raas na aayi wafa meri aur,
Ho gaye Paraye woh mujhse, thhey kabhi jo apne banaye maine"

"Kabhi rooth jata hoon khud se, toh kabhi phir khud ko manaata hoon main,
Aata hai kabhi apne haalat pe rona, to muskura ke aansuon ko chhipata hun main,
Na jaane kaisa daur hai yeh waqt ka,
Khada to hoon main apno ki bheed mein, par khud ko tanha paata hoon main"

Hope for a reply from you very soon

Thanx & Regards
Jasdeep Singh

Jante ho Jasdeep maine kabhi kisi mushaire mein kaha tha

Dukh tab nahin hota jab dil ke jazbaton ko log kavita kehte hai
Ashq tab nikalte hain jab Wah Wah karte hain,,,jab taliyan bajate hain.

Lekin dost aur kya kahoon aapke in ehsaason ke liye. Beautiful ho bhai tum...

jasdeephere · **Shukriya -** 23rd March 2007, 09:50 AM

Shukriya dosto mujhe padne ka aur usko sarahne ka.
Mujhe nahi pata tha ki mere yeh lines apko pasand ayengi kyunki maine kabhi likha hi nahi tha yeh to bas mere haalat the jo lafzon mein byan kiye hain aur apke pyaar ko paa kar main kuch aur apke nazar andaaz kar raha hun shayad yeh aapko kuch pasand aaye!!!!!!

Unke jaane ke baad jab socha yeh hamne,
Kya yehi hai sila unse dil lagaane ka,

Phir yeh samjha ke apna hi dil bewafa hai,
Jisko ab bhi hai intezaar unke laut aane ka,

Par, na bichayenge ab nazrein unki raahon mein ham,
Ab mil gya hai hamko raasta maikhane ka,

Nahi chahiye ab koi saathi hamein,
Ab to waqt hai mehfilon se utth jaane ka

Uth chukka hai yakeen khud se hi hamara,
Mat rakhna vishwaas ham pe kisi ko apnane ka

Thanx & Regards
Jasdeep Singh

dilo*ka*prince~ · 23rd March 2007, 02:00 PM

hellow yar.. .. really its nice .. achhi shuruwat he .. me b yaha abhi naya hu .. per bahut jaldi sab me shamil ho jayenge .. apne dosto ke sath apne zazbat share karte rahna .. sab aapke sath he .. milte rahna dost .. aapka apna :-) Prince..

sakhi1909 · 24th March 2007, 12:24 AM

"Fursat ke kuch lamhe nikal kar, thhey kuchh sapne sajaye maine,
Bedardo ki iss duniya se chun kar, thhey kuchh rishtey apnaye maine,
Magar waqt ko raas na aayi wafa meri aur,
Ho gaye Paraye woh mujhse, thhey kabhi jo apne banaye maine"

yahi hota hai jasdeep ji ham kisi ko apna banate hai woh chhodke chala jata hai..

"Kabhi rooth jata hoon khud se, toh kabhi phir khud ko manaata hoon main,
Aata hai kabhi apne haalat pe rona, to muskura ke aansuon ko chhipata hun main,
Na jaane kaisa daur hai yeh waqt ka,
Khada to hoon main apno ki bheed mein, par khud ko tanha paata hoon main"

bheed mein bhi tanha hona dard ka karan hai ....dard ko likhte raho kam hoga..

Unke jaane ke baad jab socha yeh hamne,
Kya yehi hai sila unse dil lagaane ka,

Phir yeh samjha ke apna hi dil bewafa hai,
Jisko ab bhi hai intezaar unke laut aane ka,

Par, na bichayenge ab nazrein unki raahon mein ham,
Ab mil gya hai hamko raasta maikhane ka,

Nahi chahiye ab koi saathi hamein,
Ab to waqt hai mehfilon se utth jaane ka

Uth chukka hai yakeen khud se hi hamara,
Mat rakhna vishwaas ham pe kisi ko apnane ka

jasdeep ji acha likh rahe ho aap....aaj apko meine pahli baar pada.....apka likha hua sahi hai....bas koshish karte jao sudhar hota jayega ...
par maikhane mein jake kya such mein apki saari kami puri ho jayengi agar aap halatoin pe hi likh rahe ho aur apne ye rasta chuna hai to yahi kahungi maikhane jana chhodke yahn aa jao aap...shayd yahan jayada sukun mile apko

likha acha hai meri daad kubul kare

sakhi

jasdeephere · 19th April 2007, 11:17 AM

shukriya prince ji.
khushi hui ki apko mere ehsaas pasand aaye

jasdeephere · 19th April 2007, 11:18 AM

shukriya sakhi ji

ek aur baat maikhane koi shauk se to nahi jata yeh to majbooriyan hi hai jo bande ko wohi raasta dikhati hai. waise padne aur hamdardi ke liye shukriya

sunita thakur · 24th April 2007, 01:39 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by jasdeephere

Hi Friends
I am very new to this forum. As i read everyone is writing their shares and ghazals, i also want to be a part of this.
Maine jo bhi likha hai woh bas mere haalat ne likhwaya hai pata nahi mujhe likhna aata bhi hai ya nahi par yeh 2 share apke sahmne pesh kar raha hun agar aap sab ki dua hui to shayad mere likhe in nagmo ka kuch mol pad jaye agar yeh kisi ek ko bhi achhe lage to.

"Fursat ke kuch lamhe nikal kar, thhey kuchh sapne sajaye maine,
Bedardo ki iss duniya se chun kar, thhey kuchh rishtey apnaye maine,
Magar waqt ko raas na aayi wafa meri aur,
Ho gaye Paraye woh mujhse, thhey kabhi jo apne banaye maine"

"Kabhi rooth jata hoon khud se, toh kabhi phir khud ko manaata hoon main,
Aata hai kabhi apne haalat pe rona, to muskura ke aansuon ko chhipata hun main,
Na jaane kaisa daur hai yeh waqt ka,
Khada to hoon main apno ki bheed mein, par khud ko tanha paata hoon main"

Hope for a reply from you very soon

Thanx & Regards
Jasdeep Singh

dear jasdeep

tumne kaha tha, ki main tumharey kalaam padugi to samaj aa jayega....so maine padda hai, samaj bhi rahi hoon....yehi zindgi hai....aapne dil ke mutabik kuch bhi nahi hota..jo upper wale ko thik lagta hai wahi hota hai...to kyu na...uske faisley ke saath hi kush raha jaye.

kush raha kijiye...aapna khayal rahey.

god bless u

jasdeephere · 24th April 2007, 03:42 PM

Sunita ji woh to aapne suna hi hoga mujhe achhe se yaad nahi par shayad kuch aise hai

"Dil ko behlane ke liye zaalim yeh khyal bhi achha hai"

theek usi tarah jaise apne kaha ke "jo upar wale ko theek lagta hai wohi hota hai to kyu na uske faisle ke saath hi khush raha jaye"

main yeh to nahi kehta ki main dukhi hoon aur udaas hoon. main ab bhi wohi hoon jo mehfil mein baith jaye to sab ko hasaa hasaa kar pet mein dard laga deta hai, main ab bhi wohi hoon jise log milna aur jiske saath baatein karna jiski hasi waali baatein sunna sab log pasand karte hai, aur main ab bhi wohi hoon jo apne ghamon ko chhipaate hue sab ko hasata hoon. lekin badlaav hai to itna ki ab kisi ke liye marr nahi sakta aur kya kahu.... rehne dijiye bas..... yeh aapke nazar ek sher kar raha hoon mera likha to nahi hai par ek gehri sachai chhippi hai isme.

(NOT MINE)

"MOHABBAT KE BHI KUCH ANDAAZ HOTE HAI,
JAAGTI AANKHON MEIN BHI KHWAAB HOTE HAI,
ZAROORI NAHI KE GHAM MEIN AANSOO NIKLE.N,
MUSKURAATI AANKHON MEIN BHI SAILAAB HOTE HAI"

himmat badhaane ke liye shukriya. bhagwaan aap jaise dost aur aap jaise bade(elders) har chhotton(youngers) ko de.....

sunita thakur · 24th April 2007, 03:46 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by jasdeephere

Sunita ji woh to aapne suna hi hoga mujhe achhe se yaad nahi par shayad kuch aise hai

"Dil ko behlane ke liye zaalim yeh khyal bhi achha hai"

theek usi tarah jaise apne kaha ke "jo upar wale ko theek lagta hai wohi hota hai to kyu na uske faisle ke saath hi khush raha jaye"

main yeh to nahi kehta ki main dukhi hoon aur udaas hoon. main ab bhi wohi hoon jo mehfil mein baith jaye to sab ko hasaa hasaa kar pet mein dard laga deta hai, main ab bhi wohi hoon jise log milna aur jiske saath baatein karna jiski hasi waali baatein sunna sab log pasand karte hai, aur main ab bhi wohi hoon jo apne ghamon ko chhipaate hue sab ko hasata hoon. lekin badlaav hai to itna ki ab kisi ke liye marr nahi sakta aur kya kahu.... rehne dijiye bas..... yeh aapke nazar ek sher kar raha hoon mera likha to nahi hai par ek gehri sachai chhippi hai isme.

(NOT MINE)

"MOHABBAT KE BHI KUCH ANDAAZ HOTE HAI,
JAAGTI AANKHON MEIN BHI KHWAAB HOTE HAI,
ZAROORI NAHI KE GHAM MEIN AANSOO NIKLE.N,
MUSKURAATI AANKHON MEIN BHI SAILAAB HOTE HAI"

himmat badhaane ke liye shukriya. bhagwaan aap jaise dost aur aap jaise bade(elders) har chhotton(youngers) ko de.....

dear jasdeep....main tumhari har baat se sahmat hoon.

aur aapka sher masha-allah bahut khoob lagga...very touching.

jasdeephere · 25th April 2007, 08:57 AM

shukriya Sunita ji