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1st December 2009, 12:27 PM
Na khawab ho na khawishe, na ho jhooti farmaishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............ zindagi se na koi shikwa ho,
na rashq ha na ranjishe, na ho dilo me saazishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho........... apno se na koi ruswa ho,
na dard ho na numaishe, na ho ashqo ki barishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... palko pe na koi gam tahera ho,
na ishq ho na aazmaishe, na ho rasmo ki bandishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... dadhkan pe na koi pehra ho.....
Shipra..
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1st December 2009, 12:38 PM
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Na khawab ho na khawishe, na ho jhooti farmaishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............ zindagi se na koi shikwa ho,
na rashq ha na ranjishe, na ho dilo me saazishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho........... apno se na koi ruswa ho,
na dard ho na numaishe, na ho ashqo ki barishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... palko pe na koi gam tahera ho,
na ishq ho na aazmaishe, na ho rasmo ki bandishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... dadhkan pe na koi pehra ho.....
Shipra..
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Shipra jii,
Bahut khoob ehsaas haiN, bahut achha laga padh ke....
Aise hi likhte rahiye....
Khush rahiye......
Aapka dost,
Vikram
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
vikramjethi@gmail.com
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1st December 2009, 12:40 PM
Shipra Ji...aapki tehreer sabhi ashaar mujhe ache lage...
aakhiri sher khaas pasand aaya..
na ishq ho na aazmaishe, na ho rasmo ki bandishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... dadhkan pe na koi pehra ho.....
likhte rahiye...
khush rahiye...
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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1st December 2009, 01:36 PM
Shipraa jee Aadaab..........
Aapki is koshish mein ek naya pan hai, aapki tehreer ke ahsaas bahut khoob lage, aur bayani bhi ek dum achchi lagi aur sabhi ashaar bahut khoob lage,
Likhati rahiye,
Khush rahiye,
Khuda Hafez
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1st December 2009, 02:39 PM
hello shipra ji..... kaisi hai aap..
wakai me aapne har sher ko bahut hi khubsurat shabdo me likha hai...........
likhte rahiye........
(๏̯͡๏) (๏̯͡๏)
Hasratein dilo ki chupaye nahi chupti hai,
dard juba par bankar bayan sab karti hai.....
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Dard ki mehfil me ek sher hum bhi aarz kiya karte hai..
Na kisi se marham Na duaon ki Ummed kiya karte hai..
kayi chehre lekar log yaha jiya karte hai.......
hum in aasunao ko ek chehre ke liye peeya karte hai....
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beautiful moment.........
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1st December 2009, 08:30 PM
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Na khawab ho na khawishe, na ho jhooti farmaishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............ zindagi se na koi shikwa ho,
na rashq ha na ranjishe, na ho dilo me saazishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho........... apno se na koi ruswa ho,
na dard ho na numaishe, na ho ashqo ki barishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... palko pe na koi gam tahera ho,
na ishq ho na aazmaishe, na ho rasmo ki bandishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... dadhkan pe na koi pehra ho.....
Shipra..
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khayaal bahut achcha hai aapka.... kaash aap jaisa sochti hai waisa hi ho.... bahut khoob ....daad kabul farmaye...khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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1st December 2009, 09:08 PM
Shipra jii...
Kaise hai aap? aaj aapki ghazal padh kar behaad aacha laga ..
ehsaas bahut khoob suraat se pesh kiye hain aapne ....har sher ke pasand aaye ... bas itna ki kahugii ..kash kabhie esa koi lamha ho ...aur yeh bhi dua kartii hu aapki har ek khwaish purii ho
Kush rahye
aur mehfil ko saajataye rahye
Take care
aapki dost
mandeep
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3rd December 2009, 11:12 AM
Thanks Vikram ji, apna saath banaye rakhiye
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4th December 2009, 07:38 PM
BahuT KhoobSuRaT Likha hai aaPne! PaD kaR behaD SakooN Mila!
Isi TaraH Se LikhTe rahiYe ...
TareeF QabooL KaRe!
ChalTa Hoon.....
AaP Ka DosT
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5th December 2009, 12:03 PM
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Shipra Ji...aapki tehreer sabhi ashaar mujhe ache lage...
aakhiri sher khaas pasand aaya..
na ishq ho na aazmaishe, na ho rasmo ki bandishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... dadhkan pe na koi pehra ho.....
likhte rahiye...
khush rahiye...
duaaon ke saath....
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bahut bahut shukria naresh ji.........
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5th December 2009, 12:04 PM
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Shipraa jee Aadaab..........
Aapki is koshish mein ek naya pan hai, aapki tehreer ke ahsaas bahut khoob lage, aur bayani bhi ek dum achchi lagi aur sabhi ashaar bahut khoob lage,
Likhati rahiye,
Khush rahiye,
Khuda Hafez
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Aadab sameer ji,
hausla afjai ke liye shukria......
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5th December 2009, 12:05 PM
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Shipra jii...
Kaise hai aap? aaj aapki ghazal padh kar behaad aacha laga ..
ehsaas bahut khoob suraat se pesh kiye hain aapne ....har sher ke pasand aaye ... bas itna ki kahugii ..kash kabhie esa koi lamha ho ...aur yeh bhi dua kartii hu aapki har ek khwaish purii ho
Kush rahye
aur mehfil ko saajataye rahye
Take care
aapki dost
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thanks alot mandeep di
aate rahiye.......
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5th December 2009, 12:06 PM
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BahuT KhoobSuRaT Likha hai aaPne! PaD kaR behaD SakooN Mila!
Isi TaraH Se LikhTe rahiYe ...
TareeF QabooL KaRe!
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Shukria amrit ji,
apna saath banaye rakhiye..........
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7th December 2009, 10:33 AM
shipra jee,
namaste:
aap ke khayaal behad achchhe hai.n aur behad maasuum bhii aur nek bhii aap ne kaafi soch samajh kar likhaa hai.... paDh kar achchha lagaa...
Na khawab ho na khawishe, na ho jhooti farmaishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............ zindagi se na koi shikwa ho,
na rashq ha na ranjishe, na ho dilo me saazishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho........... apno se na koi ruswa ho,
na dard ho na numaishe, na ho ashqo ki barishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... palko pe na koi gam tahera ho,
kaash! kaash ! kaash!......... par aisaa hotaa nahii.n...........
na ishq ho na aazmaishe, na ho rasmo ki bandishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... dadhkan pe na koi pehra ho.....
aray madam! yeh kyaa kah gayee aap? zaraa sochiye, jab na ishq hogaa, na Dhadkan me.n kisii ka pehraa hogaa... to aap ko nahii.n lagtaa ki duniyaa bejaan si ho jaayegiii........
aap ke ehsaas ko is tarah likhaa jaaye to kaisa rahegaa
na khawab ho na khawishe.n, na anginat farmaaishe.n
kaash aisaa bhii ek lamha ho, zindagii se na koii shikwa ho
na rashq ho na ranjishe.n na dilo.n me ho saazishe.n
kaash aisa bhii ek lamha ho, apno se na koii ruswa ho
na dard kii ho numaaishe.n, na ashqo.n ki ho baarishe.n
kaash aisaa bhii ek lamha ho, palko pe na Gham Thehera ho
na ishq pe ho aazmaishe.n, na rasmo ki ho bandishe.n
kaash aisaa bhii ek lamha ho, na daDhkano.n pe pehra ho
apna khayaal rakhiye..
mayank
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7th December 2009, 11:37 AM
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hello shipra ji..... kaisi hai aap..
wakai me aapne har sher ko bahut hi khubsurat shabdo me likha hai...........
likhte rahiye........
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hausla afjai ke liye shukria neha ji.........
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7th December 2009, 11:38 AM
Thanks alot lamha ji..................
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7th December 2009, 11:49 AM
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shipra jee,
namaste:
aap ke khayaal behad achchhe hai.n aur behad maasuum bhii aur nek bhii aap ne kaafi soch samajh kar likhaa hai.... paDh kar achchha lagaa...
Na khawab ho na khawishe, na ho jhooti farmaishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............ zindagi se na koi shikwa ho,
na rashq ha na ranjishe, na ho dilo me saazishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho........... apno se na koi ruswa ho,
na dard ho na numaishe, na ho ashqo ki barishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... palko pe na koi gam tahera ho,
kaash! kaash ! kaash!......... par aisaa hotaa nahii.n...........
na ishq ho na aazmaishe, na ho rasmo ki bandishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... dadhkan pe na koi pehra ho.....
aray madam! yeh kyaa kah gayee aap? zaraa sochiye, jab na ishq hogaa, na Dhadkan me.n kisii ka pehraa hogaa... to aap ko nahii.n lagtaa ki duniyaa bejaan si ho jaayegiii........
Sahi kaha mayank ji aapne, par duniya me kisi baat ka sabse jyada gam h to wo bhi to isi ki wajah se na.. to kyu na wajah ko hi khatam kar diya jaye....... bus ek khayal h......
aap ke ehsaas ko is tarah likhaa jaaye to kaisa rahegaa
na khawab ho na khawishe.n, na anginat farmaaishe.n
kaash aisaa bhii ek lamha ho, zindagii se na koii shikwa ho
na rashq ho na ranjishe.n na dilo.n me ho saazishe.n
kaash aisa bhii ek lamha ho, apno se na koii ruswa ho
na dard kii ho numaaishe.n, na ashqo.n ki ho baarishe.n
kaash aisaa bhii ek lamha ho, palko pe na Gham Thehera ho
na ishq pe ho aazmaishe.n, na rasmo ki ho bandishe.n
kaash aisaa bhii ek lamha ho, na daDhkano.n pe pehra ho
apna khayaal rakhiye..
mayank
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bahut sahi direction di h aap ne...... mujhe aapka version jyada accha laga..... yahi sab seekhna to baaki h, aage bhi isi tarah apni raaye jarur deejiyega taki hume aap se kuch seekhne ka mauqa mile or apni galtiya theek karne ka bhi.......
Thank you soo.... much.......
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8th December 2009, 11:15 AM
Shipra Jii,,,
Very nice work,,,
Likhte rahiye aur mehfil ki ronaq bharhaate rahiye,,,
Apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,,,
Faqat,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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10th December 2009, 12:24 PM
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Shipra Jii,,,
Very nice work,,,
Likhte rahiye aur mehfil ki ronaq bharhaate rahiye,,,
Apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,,,
Faqat,
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Thank you so much hasan ji,
aate rahiye.
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26th December 2009, 11:44 AM
aameen, khayal nek hain....!! yuNhi likhti rahiye...!!
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27th December 2009, 02:51 AM
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Na khawab ho na khawishe, na ho jhooti farmaishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............ zindagi se na koi shikwa ho,
na rashq ha na ranjishe, na ho dilo me saazishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho........... apno se na koi ruswa ho,
na dard ho na numaishe, na ho ashqo ki barishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... palko pe na koi gam tahera ho,
na ishq ho na aazmaishe, na ho rasmo ki bandishe...
kabhi eisa koi lamha ho............... dadhkan pe na koi pehra ho.....
Shipra..
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Shipra jee khoobsurat soch ka andaaz, kisi bhi lamha dil se nikle huway jazbaato.n ko lafzi jaama pehnaana ek mushkil kaam hai, soch kar ya you.n kahiye ki phir unki nok palak sanwaar kar unko aur bhi ziyada khoobsurat banaya ja sakta hai jaisa ki Mayank sahab ne aapki is tehree ke liy.n kia hai aur bhi ziyada khoobsurat bana dia hai isko, magr mein ye bhi bakhoobi jaanta hu.n ki jo lagaawo aapko apni kahi baat se hoga chaahei.n wo thodi si ladkhaaii hui hi kyu.n na ho magr hogi dil ke bhut qareeb, likhye aur likhti rahiye, jo baat dil ko choo jaaye whi seehi hoti hai, daad hazir hai aapke is kalaam par qubool keejiye
aslam
you.n na samjhoge kinare pe khade rehkar tum
behta dariya hu.n mujhy haath se choo kar daikho
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28th December 2009, 02:00 PM
u really blessed wid deep feel of words
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