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Dosti Kr To Lein Nibhayen Kaise - 29th August 2014, 10:37 PM

Doston, bhut Dino Ke baad kuch likh rha hoon. Umeed Krta Hoon Aapko Pasand Aayega.


Dosti Kr To Lein Nibhayen Kaise
Zakhm Gehra Hai Abhi Isko Chupayen Kaise

Koi Kanta Mere Daaman Se Lipat Jata Hai
Woh Koi Phool Nahin Usko Samjhayen Kaise

Sun Rha Hoon Main Fir Sda Kisi Ke Aane Ki
Khwab To Khwab Hai Hum Inko Sjayen Kaise

Gherti Hain Mujhko Yadon Ki Bastiyan Hardum
Koi Keh De Zra Hum Unko Bhulayen Kaise

Bekhudi Mein 'Yash' Bhut Kuch Hai Bahak Jane Ko
Aaj Hum Hosh Mein Ashkon Ko Bhayen Kaise


(Baghbaan)
Jaspal

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30th August 2014, 01:00 PM

Yash ji...Bohat khoob surat ghazal hai

Dil se dheron daad qubool kijiye




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3rd September 2014, 02:35 PM

Zainy ji, bhut bhut shukriya aapke shbdon ke liye. Mujhe taarif hi nhin aalochanyen bhi pasand hain. Kyonki aalochnayen insaan ko mazboot bnati hain usey aur acchha krne ke liye. Meri shayri mey jo kmiyan ho to zrur btaiyega. Main jyada nhin likhta pr koshish hoti hai ki acchha likhoon.

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3rd September 2014, 04:32 PM

Koi Kanta Mere Daaman Se Lipat Jata Hai
Woh Koi Phool Nahin Usko Samjhayen Kaise

wahhh wahhhh! Jaspal jee,

Bohat bohat khoob....... kamal ki peshkash hai aap ki!
bohat achaa likha hai aap ne...
DherooN daad qabool kejiye iss khoobsorat kalaam ke liye!

Likhte rahiye,
Aate rahiye,

DuaooN ke saath,



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kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN...
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5th September 2014, 11:57 AM

Hassan Ji,
Bhut bhut shukriya aapka. Aaap sbhi ka housla bdate rehte hain, yeh bhut hi acchhi baat hai. Isey kayam rkhiyega.
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9th September 2014, 11:52 AM

Bohut achha kalam Jaspal ji. Mubarak ho.

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13th September 2014, 06:53 AM

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Doston, bhut Dino Ke baad kuch likh rha hoon. Umeed Krta Hoon Aapko Pasand Aayega.


Dosti Kr To Lein Nibhayen Kaise
Zakhm Gehra Hai Abhi Isko Chupayen Kaise

Koi Kanta Mere Daaman Se Lipat Jata Hai
Woh Koi Phool Nahin Usko Samjhayen Kaise

Sun Rha Hoon Main Fir Sda Kisi Ke Aane Ki
Khwab To Khwab Hai Hum Inko Sjayen Kaise

Gherti Hain Mujhko Yadon Ki Bastiyan Hardum
Koi Keh De Zra Hum Unko Bhulayen Kaise

Bekhudi Mein 'Yash' Bhut Kuch Hai Bahak Jano Ko
Aaj Hum Hosh Mein Ashkon Ko Bhayen Kaise


(Baghbaan)
Jaspal
Waaah ! Jaspal ji

Behadd pasand aayi mujhe aapki ghajal. Ajeeb se kashmakash bayaan kar rahi hai apki ye ghazal.

Dheron daad.


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13th September 2014, 09:00 AM

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Doston, bhut Dino Ke baad kuch likh rha hoon. Umeed Krta Hoon Aapko Pasand Aayega.


Dosti Kr To Lein Nibhayen Kaise
Zakhm Gehra Hai Abhi Isko Chupayen Kaise

Koi Kanta Mere Daaman Se Lipat Jata Hai
Woh Koi Phool Nahin Usko Samjhayen Kaise

Sun Rha Hoon Main Fir Sda Kisi Ke Aane Ki
Khwab To Khwab Hai Hum Inko Sjayen Kaise

Gherti Hain Mujhko Yadon Ki Bastiyan Hardum
Koi Keh De Zra Hum Unko Bhulayen Kaise

Bekhudi Mein 'Yash' Bhut Kuch Hai Bahak Jano Ko
Aaj Hum Hosh Mein Ashkon Ko Bhayen Kaise


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Jaspal


Kyaa andaaz hai baghbaan saahab... waaahhhhhhhh

bahot hi ummdaa peshkash , bahot hi aalaa ehsaasaat aur bayaanaat.... likhte rahen

Shaad...


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13th September 2014, 01:27 PM

Mujib Ji, Sarika Ji aur Shaad ji,

Aap sbhi ka bhut bhut shukriya. Aap sbhi ne Ghazal Pdi aur apni beshkeemti raay mujhe bheji. Main koshish krta rhunga aur behatar likhne ka.

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14th September 2014, 12:06 PM

Naazuk ji,

Bhut bhut shukriya, aapne ghazal pdi aur apni raay bheji. Maqte mey ek galti rh gyi. 'Jano' k badle 'Jane' hona chahiye tha. Isme main yeh kehna chahta hoon ki bekhudi mey insaan presaani ke haalaat mey bhut kuch kr baithta hai. Kbhi bethasa rone lgta hai, kbhi bhut gussa kr baithta hai etc. etc. Lekiin ek akalmand insaan lakhon dukhon ke hote huye bhi kbhi hosh nhin khota. Woh hr mumkeen koshish krta hai haalat ko samjhne ki aur us par kaboo paane ki. Aansoo is baat ka symbol hai jise maine maqte mey use kiya hai.

Umeed krta hoon merey is explanation se aap ittefaq rkhti hongi.

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Naazuk ji,

Bhut bhut shukriya, aapne ghazal pdi aur apni raay bheji. Maqte mey ek galti rh gyi. 'Jano' k badle 'Jane' hona chahiye tha. Isme main yeh kehna chahta hoon ki bekhudi mey insaan presaani ke haalaat mey bhut kuch kr baithta hai. Kbhi bethasa rone lgta hai, kbhi bhut gussa kr baithta hai etc. etc. Lekiin ek akalmand insaan lakhon dukhon ke hote huye bhi kbhi hosh nhin khota. Woh hr mumkeen koshish krta hai haalat ko samjhne ki aur us par kaboo paane ki. Aansoo is baat ka symbol hai jise maine maqte mey use kiya hai.

Umeed krta hoon merey is explanation se aap ittefaq rkhti hongi.

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17th September 2014, 12:26 PM

Zainy ji, thanks for editing Maqta.

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