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Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai -
15th November 2006, 08:41 PM
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai.
Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka
dil kaatiloN ka dehlne laga hai.
Kab tak bhala kaid saanse rahengi,
kawach badiyoN ka pighalne laga hai.
Gumrah kab tak raheingi dishayeiN,
Tewar aasmaaN ka badalne laga hai.
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
Harash
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15th November 2006, 09:33 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Harash Mahajan
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai.
bahot khub mere dost harash ji jabajst shuruaat!!!!!!
Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka
dil kaatiloN ka dehlne laga hai.
Kab tak bhala kaid saanse rahengi,
kawach badiyoN ka pighalne laga hai.
alag se andaz me aapne pesh kiya achha laga harshji
Gumrah kab tak raheingi dishayeiN,
Tewar aasmaaN ka badalne laga hai.
ye sher mujhe bahot pasand aaya my fav.
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
bahot ahhey sher hai ye dono achha likha hai
Harash
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HARASH JI FIR SE EK BEHTRIN KALAAM PESH KIYA AAPNE
DIL SE NIKLI DAAD KUBUL KIJIYENGA
KHUS RAHIYE
APNA KHAYAL RAKKHIYE
AAPKA DOST
DHAVAL
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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15th November 2006, 09:51 PM
Harash Ji
Aapko parhkar bahaut accha laga. yeh panktiyaan bahaut kuch kehgayi hain:
" Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka / dil kaatiloN ka dehlne laga hai"
lajawaab hai
vipin
विपिन
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16th November 2006, 09:27 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Harash Mahajan
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai.
Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka
dil kaatiloN ka dehlne laga hai.
Kab tak bhala kaid saanse rahengi,
kawach badiyoN ka pighalne laga hai.
Gumrah kab tak raheingi dishayeiN,
Tewar aasmaaN ka badalne laga hai.
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
Harash
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bahut khoobsurat harash ji, yu hi likhtey rahiye.
aapki dost
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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16th November 2006, 07:15 PM
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Originally Posted by dhavalrami4you
HARASH JI FIR SE EK BEHTRIN KALAAM PESH KIYA AAPNE
DIL SE NIKLI DAAD KUBUL KIJIYENGA
KHUS RAHIYE
APNA KHAYAL RAKKHIYE
AAPKA DOST
DHAVAL
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bahoot bahoot shukriya dost
Harash
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17th November 2006, 11:01 PM
Gumrah kab tak raheingi dishayeiN,
Tewar aasmaaN ka badalne laga hai.
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai
Namaskar Harsh ji
A very impressive inspirational poetry.....Parh kar har sher ke liye waah nikle..beautiful poetry.......hamare daad kabul kijeyega....it was nice to read an inspirational poetry after a long time......keep up the good work
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18th November 2006, 01:26 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Harash Mahajan
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai.
Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka
dil kaatiloN ka dehlne laga hai.
Kab tak bhala kaid saanse rahengi,
kawach badiyoN ka pighalne laga hai.
Gumrah kab tak raheingi dishayeiN,
Tewar aasmaaN ka badalne laga hai.
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
Harash
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Harash Ji...!
Aap ko parha aur daad diye bina na reh sake hum...! Aap ne vaakai ek umda kalaam likha hai...!
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
I appreciate the above mentioned sher most...
Younhi likhte rahiyega
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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18th November 2006, 12:23 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Harash Mahajan
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai.
Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka
dil kaatiloN ka dehlne laga hai.
Kab tak bhala kaid saanse rahengi,
kawach badiyoN ka pighalne laga hai.
Gumrah kab tak raheingi dishayeiN,
Tewar aasmaaN ka badalne laga hai.
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
Harash
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harsh ji namaskar
aaj aapne leak se hatkar bahut hi umda kalam pesh kiya hai
dil se meri daad kabool kigiye
bahut badiya ese hi likhte rahiye ga
aapka dost
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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18th November 2006, 02:00 PM
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai!!
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai!!
Jaisi khubsurat shuruat .... waisa hi anjaam!!! Daad haazir hai gurudev!!!
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22nd November 2006, 12:13 AM
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Originally Posted by sukanya
Gumrah kab tak raheingi dishayeiN,
Tewar aasmaaN ka badalne laga hai.
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai
Namaskar Harsh ji
A very impressive inspirational poetry.....Parh kar har sher ke liye waah nikle..beautiful poetry.......hamare daad kabul kijeyega....it was nice to read an inspirational poetry after a long time......keep up the good work
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Sukanya ji bahoot bahoot shukriya aapko ye kalaam dil se pasand aya...aap yuin hi apne kalam se shabd sazate rahein..hum bhi aapki rahoon main....isi tarah kalaam lehraate rahein...God bless u always
Harash
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22nd November 2006, 12:15 AM
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Originally Posted by Mushkil
Harash Ji...!
Aap ko parha aur daad diye bina na reh sake hum...! Aap ne vaakai ek umda kalaam likha hai...!
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
I appreciate the above mentioned sher most...
Younhi likhte rahiyega
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Bahoot bahoot shukriya mushkil saheb....
God bless you
Harash
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22nd November 2006, 12:16 AM
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Originally Posted by dilip200
harsh ji namaskar
aaj aapne leak se hatkar bahut hi umda kalam pesh kiya hai
dil se meri daad kabool kigiye
bahut badiya ese hi likhte rahiye ga
aapka dost
dilip
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Diliipsaheb...ab kya kahien....ab kalam kis our kya dasha dikhaye...kutchh maloom nahi parta janaab.....bahoot bahoot shukriya..
Harash
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22nd November 2006, 12:17 AM
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Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai!!
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai!!
Jaisi khubsurat shuruat .... waisa hi anjaam!!! Daad haazir hai gurudev!!!
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bahoot bahoot shukriya dheer ji..
harash
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22nd November 2006, 11:13 AM
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai.
Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka
dil kaatiloN ka dehlne laga hai.
Kab tak bhala kaid saanse rahengi,
kawach badiyoN ka pighalne laga hai.
Gumrah kab tak raheingi dishayeiN,
Tewar aasmaaN ka badalne laga hai.
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
Harash ji ko raj ka namaskaar......harash ji ek baat kehta hoon aapse ki agar aap itna acha likhte ho to plzzzzz aapse guzarish hai ki humme kush lafaz zaroor diya kari jinse hum aapki tareef me kush keh sake.......saach me aap bhut acha or bhut gehra likhte ho........mazza aa jata hai aapko parhkar....yu hee likhte rehna........take care.........raj.......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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22nd November 2006, 07:06 PM
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai.
Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka
dil kaatiloN ka dehlne laga hai.
Khoobs bayaani hai Harsh bhai...
Kab tak bhala kaid saanse rahengi,
kawach badiyoN ka pighalne laga hai.
Gumrah kab tak raheingi dishayeiN,
Tewar aasmaaN ka badalne laga hai.
nice words...
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
hmmmmmmmm...
Harsh bhai,
Kaise hain? Ummeed hai bahut acche se honge...
Bahut khooburat likha hai aapne... Ek message hai aapki tehreer me... padhkar accha laga... aise hi likhte raha kijiye.. apna khayal rakhiyega...
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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23rd November 2006, 12:31 PM
HarSh jee,
Bohat Khuub liKha hai aap ne.. Daad qubool keejiyegaa.. yuuN to sabhi Sher achchhe haiN, paR yeH sher zeyaadah pasand aaye..
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai.
ess sher ke duusre misre ko ess tarah liKh deN to rawaani meiN ezaafa hoga..
'Mausam bhi Shola ugalne laga hai'
Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka
dil kaatiloN ka dehalne laga hai.
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
Kya baat hai, bohat khuub! ek achchhi tehreer ke liye daad haazir hai.. qubool keejiyega..
Mayank
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23rd November 2006, 10:24 PM
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Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai.
Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka
dil kaatiloN ka dehlne laga hai.
Khoobs bayaani hai Harsh bhai...
Kab tak bhala kaid saanse rahengi,
kawach badiyoN ka pighalne laga hai.
Gumrah kab tak raheingi dishayeiN,
Tewar aasmaaN ka badalne laga hai.
nice words...
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
hmmmmmmmm...
Harsh bhai,
Kaise hain? Ummeed hai bahut acche se honge...
Bahut khooburat likha hai aapne... Ek message hai aapki tehreer me... padhkar accha laga... aise hi likhte raha kijiye.. apna khayal rakhiyega...
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waah pulkit ji......bahoot dino baad dikhe aap janaab....kaise hain aap...n shukriya is stoppage ka...
god bless you always
Harash
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23rd November 2006, 10:34 PM
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Originally Posted by Anjana Rahi
HarSh jee,
Bohat Khuub liKha hai aap ne.. Daad qubool keejiyegaa.. yuuN to sabhi Sher achchhe haiN, paR yeH sher zeyaadah pasand aaye..
Rukh ab hawa ka badalne laga hai
ye mousam bhi ab shola ugalne laga hai.
ess sher ke duusre misre ko ess tarah liKh deN to rawaani meiN ezaafa hoga..
'Mausam bhi Shola ugalne laga hai'
Jabse pata chal gaya sazishoN ka
dil kaatiloN ka dehalne laga hai.
Faouladi haathoN ka aisa hai jadoo,
kohre ka alam bikharne laga hai.
Tim-tim sitaroN ko chhupna hi hoga
Andhere mein suraj Nikalne laga hai.
Kya baat hai, bohat khuub! ek achchhi tehreer ke liye daad haazir hai.. qubool keejiyega..
Mayank
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Mayank ji bahoot bahoot shukriya...aapko tehreer pasand ayi.....
and thx for your editing....ye our bhi sunder hogaya ji....waise its my instant write n second thought se pehle hi chhorh diya.....
Ek baar phir bahoot bahoot shukriya
harash
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