Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye....!
 

Radhika ji realy very nice creation.

Bhot khub

Pawan(shayari)

Radhika Ji ... Ehsaas acche lage mujhe .... koshish bahut khoob rahi iss baar ....Aur aise hi mehnat karti rahen... yun hi likhti rahen .... dil se daad hazir hai ... qubuul farmaayeN ...khush rahen ...

duaaon ke saath .....

hisssssssssssssss

stupendous ....

written like a pro...

bahaut bahut acche aur acche sher hai..........
ek sher bhi kamzor nahi laga ya zabarasti qafiya puri kiya ho aisa laga ho......
real shayri witn real wordplay........
phuuuuuuu........bilkul aisi jaise mai likhne ka khwaab dekhta hu........
aur koshish karta hu.....

itni gazab ki aadmi waah karna bhool jaaye......

thanks for sharing this ghazal with us.......

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iske ek sher par mai bhi ek ghazal kahna hahta hu.....magar mujhe modify karna hoga...aap ijazat den to bahut grateful rahunga....

Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

regards

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ye mas'ala samjh nahi aa raha hai...eka ek achanak sdc par ladkiya itne form me kaise aa gayin hai..har ek ball par sixer maar rahi hain:confused::confused:

Iss ghazal par apni commentry ke apne rights ko main hamesha apne pass rakkhoonga.

Zidd sahab ka comment achchha nahi laga mujhe.

Seeney mai zakhm utaare chale gaye
jo humpe guzri guzaare chale gaye

bhut acha matla kaha hai aapne baaqi ke tamaam ashaar bhut ahcay haiN achi paishkash ke liyN daad hazir hai qubool keejiye


aslam

Matlaa bahut khoob rahaa...! Samajhne maiN kuch der houi thi hameiN lekin jab samjhaa to bahut khaas lagaa...! :)

Um'r daraazi Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

Ab um'r daraazi ka kya kareiN jo hamare apne hi na rahe...? Very good thought...!

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

Hope is always the last one to die...! Nice one...! :)

Sard Hawa Ka JhoNkha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

Hmmm...!

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
MuddateiN Biiti Woh Nazare Chale Gaye

Maqta bhi bahut soch samajh kar rachaa gayaa hai...! I love it...!

Compliments for this beautiful poetry, Radhika Ji...!

:)

ji bhaut bhaut shukriya.....................:)

ji bhaut bhaut shukriya.........................:)

Hello,This is sneha here,,i like very much .................
i wished to Radhika..............:cool: :cool:

Ji .. shukriya daad aur duaaon ka ...........:)

ji bhaut bhaut shukriya..........................:)

Good job done. Keep it up. Thanks for sharing............

ji thanks for appreciate..............................:)

Um'r daraazi Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

bahut khoob radhika ji......

Ji ... thanks for appreciate.............................. ! :)

Hey Radhika............ Your shayri is wonderful i like very much.......
Thanks for sharing us........

radhika jee,

bahot hi khoob likha hai aapne.. dil se daad deta hun..

Um'r daraazi Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

wahh wahh wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

behad dil ko chu lene wale ehsaas haiN.. gar meri tarah koi aur bhi ghazal likhne ki bas koshish karr raha hai to use aapki yeh rachna zaroor padhni chaahiye :)

khush rahiye..god bless

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman

Hello Radhikaji.............
Its amazing, Lajwab,,,,,,,

"Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye

Um'r-O-Daraj Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
MuddatoN Biiti Woh Nazare Chale Gaye

Thanks sharing that,,,,,,,,,its wonderful shayri.... Keep it up....

kya baat! bahut hi khoobsurat gajal hai radhika ji..daad ..

ji thanks.................................:)

Ji ... thanks for appreciate............... :)

ji shukriya......................:)

Just beautiful

Radhika ji is sundar rachna par aap ko mubarakbaad.

rajinderseep