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Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye....! - 11th October 2010, 01:35 PM
Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye

Um'r daraazi Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
MuddateiN Biiti Woh Nazare Chale Gaye



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Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
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11th October 2010, 07:19 PM
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Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye

Um'r-O-Daraj Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
MuddatoN Biiti Woh Nazare Chale Gaye
Radhika Ji ... Ehsaas acche lage mujhe .... koshish bahut khoob rahi iss baar ....Aur aise hi mehnat karti rahen... yun hi likhti rahen .... dil se daad hazir hai ... qubuul farmaayeN ...khush rahen ...

duaaon ke saath .....



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Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...

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Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye

Um'r-O-Daraj Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
MuddatoN Biiti Woh Nazare Chale Gaye
hisssssssssssssss

stupendous ....

written like a pro...

bahaut bahut acche aur acche sher hai..........
ek sher bhi kamzor nahi laga ya zabarasti qafiya puri kiya ho aisa laga ho......
real shayri witn real wordplay........
phuuuuuuu........bilkul aisi jaise mai likhne ka khwaab dekhta hu........
aur koshish karta hu.....

itni gazab ki aadmi waah karna bhool jaaye......

thanks for sharing this ghazal with us.......

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iske ek sher par mai bhi ek ghazal kahna hahta hu.....magar mujhe modify karna hoga...aap ijazat den to bahut grateful rahunga....

Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

regards

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ye mas'ala samjh nahi aa raha hai...eka ek achanak sdc par ladkiya itne form me kaise aa gayin hai..har ek ball par sixer maar rahi hain
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Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye

Um'r-O-Daraj Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
MuddatoN Biiti Woh Nazare Chale Gaye
radhika jee
radhe radhe

bahut khoob.........dil se daad kubul karen
duaon ke saath

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Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
MuddatoN Biiti Woh Nazare Chale Gaye

Seeney mai zakhm utaare chale gaye
jo humpe guzri guzaare chale gaye

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Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
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Matlaa bahut khoob rahaa...! Samajhne maiN kuch der houi thi hameiN lekin jab samjhaa to bahut khaas lagaa...!

Um'r daraazi Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

Ab um'r daraazi ka kya kareiN jo hamare apne hi na rahe...? Very good thought...!

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

Hope is always the last one to die...! Nice one...!

Sard Hawa Ka JhoNkha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

Hmmm...!

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
MuddateiN Biiti Woh Nazare Chale Gaye

Maqta bhi bahut soch samajh kar rachaa gayaa hai...! I love it...!

Compliments for this beautiful poetry, Radhika Ji...!






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Radhika Ji ... Ehsaas acche lage mujhe .... koshish bahut khoob rahi iss baar ....Aur aise hi mehnat karti rahen... yun hi likhti rahen .... dil se daad hazir hai ... qubuul farmaayeN ...khush rahen ...

duaaon ke saath .....
ji bhaut bhaut shukriya.........................


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radhe radhe

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Ji .. shukriya daad aur duaaon ka ...........


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stupendous ....

written like a pro...

bahaut bahut acche aur acche sher hai..........
ek sher bhi kamzor nahi laga ya zabarasti qafiya puri kiya ho aisa laga ho......
real shayri witn real wordplay........
phuuuuuuu........bilkul aisi jaise mai likhne ka khwaab dekhta hu........
aur koshish karta hu.....

itni gazab ki aadmi waah karna bhool jaaye......

thanks for sharing this ghazal with us.......

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iske ek sher par mai bhi ek ghazal kahna hahta hu.....magar mujhe modify karna hoga...aap ijazat den to bahut grateful rahunga....

Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

regards

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ye mas'ala samjh nahi aa raha hai...eka ek achanak sdc par ladkiya itne form me kaise aa gayin hai..har ek ball par sixer maar rahi hain
ji bhaut bhaut shukriya..........................


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Um'r daraazi Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
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Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye


Matlaa bahut khoob rahaa...! Samajhne maiN kuch der houi thi hameiN lekin jab samjhaa to bahut khaas lagaa...!

Um'r daraazi Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

Ab um'r daraazi ka kya kareiN jo hamare apne hi na rahe...? Very good thought...!

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

Hope is always the last one to die...! Nice one...!

Sard Hawa Ka JhoNkha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

Hmmm...!

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
MuddateiN Biiti Woh Nazare Chale Gaye

Maqta bhi bahut soch samajh kar rachaa gayaa hai...! I love it...!

Compliments for this beautiful poetry, Radhika Ji...!
Ji ... thanks for appreciate.............................. !


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radhika jee,

bahot hi khoob likha hai aapne.. dil se daad deta hun..

Um'r daraazi Ki Duaa Mili Jub
Door Humse Hamarey Chale Gaye

wahh wahh wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye

behad dil ko chu lene wale ehsaas haiN.. gar meri tarah koi aur bhi ghazal likhne ki bas koshish karr raha hai to use aapki yeh rachna zaroor padhni chaahiye

khush rahiye..god bless

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Hello Radhikaji.............
Its amazing, Lajwab,,,,,,,

"Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
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Um'r-O-Daraj Ki Duaa Mili Jub
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Sard Hawa Ka Jhokha Kuch Aisa Chala
Kaafila Cho'D Banjare Chale Gaye

KahaN DekheN Woh Roshan Chirag "Radhika"
MuddatoN Biiti Woh Nazare Chale Gaye

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bahot hi khoob likha hai aapne.. dil se daad deta hun..

Um'r daraazi Ki Duaa Mili Jub
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wahh wahh wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
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behad dil ko chu lene wale ehsaas haiN.. gar meri tarah koi aur bhi ghazal likhne ki bas koshish karr raha hai to use aapki yeh rachna zaroor padhni chaahiye

khush rahiye..god bless

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bahot khoob peshkash rahi hai radhika jee... hame ye do aashaar behad ummdah lage... likhti rahiye...
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