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bahut yaad aati hai aaj bhi wo haseen raat -
10th April 2010, 07:47 AM
doston waise to layak nahi hoon ke yahan kuch likh sakoon par rah nahi paya to chala aaya.........aaj bhi kuch likhne ja raha hoon wo meri dil-e-jana (jo apke SDC pariwar ka hi hissa hai) ke us thread ka jawab hai jo usne mujhse bina kahe yahan post kiya tha........chahta to bahut pehle isse post kar sakta tha par sabse pehle usse sunana chahta tha.......to kal raat usse apni aawaz ki shakal me sunaya.......aur ab apke sath apne wo haseen pal banNt raha hoon......isme kamiyan maat nikaliyega.......main janta hoon ke isme kamiyan hain par wo chahti thi ke main isse essa hi rahne dun.......to mere pyar ki khatir.................apka karzdar rahunga....
bahut yaad aati hai aaj bhi wo haseen raat tera wo machalna, teri har baat kuch na kahke mere sene se lipat jana tera karne dena sahme se dilo'N ko apas me baat meri wo shaitaniyaan, teri wo ched - chad shab-e-raat kuch yun hi di thi hamne gujar surkh hothon ka tere pina mera wo jam madhoshi me tera wo kah jana 'hey ram' tera wo chur ho jana mera mazbur ho jana saNson ka sene me wo theher ke aana - jana mera tujh ko phir wo soye se jagana tera phir se wo meri aagosh me samana tere jane ke baad bhi main so nahi paya tujh ko kho kar bhi main tujh ko kho nahi paya bahut yaad aati hai aaj bhi wo haseen raat tera wo machalna, teri har baat mafi chahunga ek jagah maine "hey ram" shabad ka istemal kiya hai wo sirf isliye ke ye do jismo'N ka ya do aatmao'N ka nahi do dharmo ka bhi milan hai..........jo aaj tak nahi ho paya hai...............  mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM) |
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10th April 2010, 03:40 PM
bahut hi khoobsurat ahsaso se lavalab apki shayri ham bahut hi achchi lagi..............likhte rahe........shukriya
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10th April 2010, 03:50 PM
Secrect sahab!
secrect lafzoN mein kafi kuch kah diyaa aapne.....  . aise manzar khincha hai raat ki kahani ka ke kya kahun ..  . bahut khoob thode technics mein kami hai per jaldi sudhar aa jayenga.... Waise aap hasyaa kavia bahu khoob kahte ho... Likhate rhaiye, Khush rhaiye, khuda Hafez..... 
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10th April 2010, 07:23 PM
Mashaallah... aapki kalam ko kisi ki nazar naa lage...aapki wo haseen raat ki kahani padhkar to hamare chaarsu ek suroor sa chhaa gaya... madh-hosh kar diya aapne to... yu laga jaise ye pyaar bhari saari sharaaratein hum padh nahi rahe apni aankho se dekh rahe hai.... aapke lafzon me ek ajeeb sa jaadu mehsoos hua... aapke ehsaas bahut dilnashi hai aur lafzon ki adaygi bahut hi dilkash...... wakehi aisi baatein aur aisi raatein bhulaye nahi bhulti.... Allah kare aapko aapka pyaar jald se jald haasil ho jaye... yuhi likhte rahiye aur is mehfil ko madh-hosh karte rahiye.... khush rahiye....
 "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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10th April 2010, 07:42 PM
aapki tehreer ka madhosh kar dene waala manzar ......waqaai dilkash raha......ek bindaas koshish........dil se daad hazir hai.....yunhi likhte rahen......jaisa sameer ji ne ishaara kiya hai .......thoda taknik par dhiyaan de.....khush rahen....
apna khayal rakhen... duaaon ke saath...  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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10th April 2010, 08:28 PM
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apki dua rahi to aage bhi kuch na kuch likhta rahunga..........apka. mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM) |
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10th April 2010, 08:32 PM
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ji apne thik kaha hai taknik me kuch sudhar ki jarurat hai........par maine upar pehle hi kah diya tha ke meri mazboori hai ke main bina sudhar ke hi isse post kar raha hoon............ apna sath banaye rakhyega........ apka. mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM) |
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10th April 2010, 08:35 PM
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aab apse kya kahun........apke samne to meri bolti hamesha hi banNd rahti hai........ aapne yahan aakar meri koshish ko saraha apka dhanywad........... apka. mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM) |
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10th April 2010, 08:48 PM
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apki baaton par jarur dhyan dunga.......... apka. mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM) |
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Tere Intzaar Mein....
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10th April 2010, 09:03 PM
secret admirer
bahut kub........... aese hi likhte raheN zaari apnaa safar rakhtaa huN !! ===========================  sharma.rajeev701@gmail.com https://www.facebook.com/rajeevsharmaraj111 http://www.rajeevsharmaraj.blogspot.com/ |
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10th April 2010, 10:48 PM
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apka. mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM) |
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11th April 2010, 02:09 PM
Its a bit "Kitschy" Work, as most of the members in here are illiberal so they may find few words in it as lewd....
 Khair ...as you are aware yahan par kids bhi aatey hai searching for sms and some newbies to impress their loved ones.... by couplets. We have to be careful ........... (what we should post) |
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13th April 2010, 10:32 AM
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Thanks Baqs aapne mere dil ki baat kah di. Sir aapne jo likha hai kya aapko lagta hai ki apni enti personel baateN openly share karni chahiye, theek hai aap shayri karte hain apne dil ki baat khul kar kah sakte hain par kuch to hamare hadeN (limits) hoti haiN, aap hum ya koi bhi member apne raat ke kisse aise khuleaam likhe....accha nahi lagta, yahan par hamare kuch member aise bhi hain jo 15-16 saal ke ya es se bhi kum hain. main kai baar SDc par raat ko jab visit karti hoon to mere dono bacche bhi mere saath baithe hote haiN ki mumma hum bhi padeNge kya likha hai, es surat meiN agar aisa padne ko mil jaye to bacchoN ke saamne hamari kya respect rah jayegi ki hamare parents khud aisa likhtey padtey haiN. pls aap meri baat ka bura mat maniye aap apni es poetry ke kuch sher jo jayada hi personel haiN, edit karke hume pm kar dijiye, hum aapki edit ki hue gazal yahan post kar deNge. nahi to majbooran yeh thread hume delete karna padega. yeh msg main aapko PM bhi kar sakti thi, par yahan es liye likha hai taaki in future koi aur member aisa na post kare, yahan har umr ke member aate hain, SDC ki maan maryada hum sab se hai. take care .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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13th April 2010, 10:41 AM
Sunita...................Wherez my post for that faltoooo Despo..... hahaha
Lamha (The one on high hormones) uske liye bhi ek post likhi thi meine |
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13th April 2010, 10:45 AM
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mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM) |
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13th April 2010, 11:32 AM
Bhayee ... achi ghazal haui
waise khyaal mujeh bhi yahi aaya tha ki.... thoda ... jayda hi khulapan ho gaya... fir apni girebaan mai jhaank ek dekah to chup ho gaya but aap ..... thoda lafzo ka her fer kar sakte hai.... thoda pardaa bhi bana rahe aur bat hi saaf rahe khair mujeh ye sher khaas acha laga surkh hothon ka tere pina mera wo jam madhoshi me tera wo kah jana 'hey ram' hey raam ka expression .... bas kya kahu ... jaise mere kaano mai fir se koe awaaz yahi lafz pahne aa gayee ho aur rahi do majhabo ka milan ... to kya kaheN ...... hum to likh likh ke haar gaye |
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13th April 2010, 12:09 PM
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shukriya janumanu ji........ye pal maine sirf khayalo'N me bitaye the .......... tabhi shayad aaj shayar hoon waise kahtein hain na 'shayar ki koi haad nahi hoti ishq ki koi sarhad nahi hoti wo to kah jata hai madhoshi me khud usko bhi uski khabar nahi hoti' apka. mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM) |
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13th April 2010, 01:48 PM
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sir main aapki poori gazal delete nahi krooNgi, haan aapne delete karne ko kaha to maine ek sher aur ek do aur lafaz delete kiye haiN taaki es gazal ki khoobsurati bhi kum na ho aur padne waleoN ko bhi kuch bura na lage, umeed hai aapko meri edition theek lagegi. muje accha laga ki aapne meri baat ka bura nahi maana aur baat ka matlab samja. thanks .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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13th April 2010, 04:00 PM
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sunita ji, aapne jo bhi kiya main is baat ke fer me nahi padna chahta ke wo galat kiya ya accha kiya kyunki apne mujhe kaha tha ke main isse edit karun to wo mere liye kuch aisa ho jata jaise main khud ke khayalo'N ka apne un ahsaso'N ka'tal kar raha hoon mere liye ab ye gazal sirf un khayalo'N ki ek zinda lash hai aur aaj se ye thread meri kabr'R............ aap meri baat ka bura na mane aap ne jo bhi kiya apka farz tha aur mujhe apse koi shikwa - shikayat nahi hai........ (ab is gazal ko aise hi bani rahne dein) apka. mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM) |
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